It's always cool to see what talented people can create in Twine. I really liked the day-night cycle to represent the journey, and the scene with the star admittedly startled the hell out of me until I saw the ending. Bittersweet but gorgeously written :')
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;-; this was so good
Thank you ♡
Beautiful! Also haunting, sweet, heartbreaking, and touching. Not to mention the technical quality, which is huge, as always.
A few small typos I noticed along the way:
“wrapp
er[ed] in white linen”“at last we have reached the plateau[x]” (unless it’s meant to be plural)
“countless spec[k]s of light”
Thank you for the compliments and typo hunt ♡
"plateaux" is meant to be plural but I assume "plateaus" sounds more natural in this case, I was unsure about it...
I really liked the use of colors and the symbols of celestial bodies you use. The writing is brief but very evocative.
Thank you ♡
It's always cool to see what talented people can create in Twine. I really liked the day-night cycle to represent the journey, and the scene with the star admittedly startled the hell out of me until I saw the ending. Bittersweet but gorgeously written :')
Thank you ♡
Writing isn't my strong suit so I'll use every presentation trick in the book :p